Last
week I blogged about the need for writers circles and readers. We all need feedback from others, because
nobody can objectively read their own material.
As promised, this week’s blog shares some of the valuable comments I’ve
received.
Projects
1, We Can Give Our Grandchild a Better
World – The Next Golden Age: Diedre and I exchanged reviews of each other’s
Proposal Packages. I definitely received
more than I gave in this deal. First,
she suggested that I add a list of endorsements (not the full endorsements) of
my book and a list or description of potential follow up books. The endorsements
say someone thinks your work is worth publishing, and the follow up books say
there is potential for additional money to be made.
Her comments on my Overview and Sample Chapters gave me new perspectives
of different generation, gender, geography, and social/political viewpoints. These perspectives will help me re-edit my
work to eliminate at least a few inadvertent offensive statements. Note: this is a currents events book, so it
will have a sufficient population of intentionally controversial ideas. I don’t need unintentional discord.
Project
2, Sammy the Sock: This children’s
book has received the widest review of my projects. Some of my kids and grandkids read it…
and liked it. That told me I wasn’t
totally off base. The children’s librarian at our local library was kind enough
to read it. She also liked the story,
especially the surprise ending. Great, a
professional says it has merit and the “gimmick” worked. She recommended working on some of the
dialogue that seemed stilted to her.
Diedre took the time to give it a quick read, pointing out some areas where the tenses
were ambiguous or confusing. Finally,
I’ve sent it to a professional editor. She recommended
adding more depth to the story by giving the main character deeper inner
motivation. I pulled off a "two-fer" by
adding more dialogue for the main character, which also enabled the
character tell more of the story.
Project
3, The Princess and the Blacksmith’s Son:
a short story about a dragon, a princess, and the hero that rescues her. (Yes, I
have too many projects, but this one is now on the back burner until the above
two are in the query stage). Through our
writers club I was able to find two experienced writers willing to critique the
project. They returned 12 pages of
comments on my 20-page short story. I’ll
spare you the details. What I found most
interesting was that their comments were very different. One addressed more structural improvements,
while the other emphasized improving character (and therefore story) details. The
good news: both considered the project salvageable and worth salvaging, but
needing a total rewrite.
Last thought, from
The Essential Guide to Getting Your Book
Published, “After you’ve sucked all the advice you can out of your readers,
and made your edits, take the time to read your manuscript to yourself out
loud. That’s right, your whole
manuscript. Out loud. You’ll be
surprised to discover how you’re suddenly able to hear sentences or passages
that sound awkward.”
Good
luck and happy editing.
Chris4Gkids